Through out the story there are subtle references to the senses of the sighted charecters. This allows us to feel more connected to the blind charecters when they come in whilst still feeling connected with the sighted charecters. This way none of the charecters are alienated to us unintentionally.

There are some wonderful ideas and concepts scattered throughout here and plenty of food for thought, but not so much as to confuse the reader or overwhelem them with distracting thoughts whilst the story is still being told.

The end of the story is excellent. It’s fast, intimate, touching. Simply great. The cliff hanger gets me going (I am a literary acrophobic!). The end does however slightly confuse me. Talking about the renovation work, it is too loose. It is fine in a story to leave things open at the end for the reader to interpret but usually there needs to be a few doors boarded along the trail to keep too much cold air from entering at the end of the story so to speak. My problem is, I understand that there may be hope after all. But I don’t have much of an inkling as to what it i. Could it be regenerating the iris? That doesn’t seem to fit for me. Some people would find this ending faultless for them. But I crave acknowledgement of possibilities (not trusting my own decisions too much).

Overall, I love this story. It’s a good length, and as is rare kept me interested! Some short story writiers rely on plot alone to keep the reader interested. Many short stories I have begun to read and simply fell in love with the plot, only to be distracted by somehting else and not come back to finish readin the story. David has sharpened the instruments in his tool box and as a result his writing is a pleasure to read! The only problem I got was the line breaks perhaps caused by the CSS formatting of the blog. Once I got used to that the story sailed by an di loved it. Very inspiring, very thought provoking.
I give it a thumbs up!
Well done!